This blog will include all of the feedbacks that I've received from my partner in the class 1003.
FROM TAN 1003
After finishing “Who am I” you recently wrote, many questions were pouring out of my head. This is one part I enjoyed about your story, the mysteriousness of it. Many questions and plot holes were still unanswered albeit this can be somewhat beneficial to your story. In this case, it gave the story an inner dept which requires the mind of the reader to resonate or understand. Moving on the characters in your story. There are clearly 3 main characters in this story, the step-dad, mom, and Jack. These characters have very different stereotypes in my perspective. The step-dad seems extremely strong in both physically and mentally at first but was shown to be somewhat vulnerable due to his dark past. Weird and stupid is what I would describe the character of the mom based on her actions. The step-dad was obviously trash and worth dumping, this is something she didn’t do. This is one of the things I would also like you to improve on and it would be awesome if you did. Then there is Jack, he has a nice background and is a well-balanced character. The murderer that is revealed in the ending was very unexpected which I like. Before giving you my advice, I do want to know how Jack fought the step-dad when he killed him. He seems to be weak and frail yet won a battle against him. My advice for you moving forward is fixing your grammars, tweaking the characters to fit the plot, and fixing some scene to be more sensible.
FROM LEO 1003
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